作文重在點評，寫10篇作文不如賣力剖析一篇好文章，以是，考生在備考gre寫作測驗的時刻必弗成少的一個進程便是學會剖析GRE寫作範文，那GRE寫作範文怎樣用呢?喜下面以一篇新GRE高分寫作亮點點評為例，為考生剖析。
"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developingsintostruly strong and independent individuals."
Do modern luxuries serve to undermine our true strength and independence as individuals? The speaker believes so, and I tend to agree. Consider the automobile, for example. Most people consider the automobile a necessity rather than a luxury; yet it is for this very reason that the automobile so aptly supports the speaker‘s point. To the extent that we depend on cars as crutches, they prevent us from becoming truly independent and strong in character as individuals.
可鑒戒的地方：開首啟用了一個異常醒目標問句，這是最能吸引批卷者視野也是高分作文的表示!
Consider first the effect of the automobile on our independence as individuals. In some respects the automobile serves to enhance such independence. For example, cars make it possible for people in isolated and depressed areas without public transportation to become more independent by pursuing gainful employment outside their communities. And teenagers discover that owning a car, or even borrowing one on occasion, affords them a needed sense of independence from their parents.
此段主如果為下一段的駁論作鋪墊。
精髓：Consider first...
in some respects...=in some cases, to some extent
留意afford的用法
However, cars have diminished our independence in a number of more significant respects.
We've grown dependent on our cars for commuting to work. We rely on them like crutches for short trips to the corner store, and for carting our children to and from school. Moreover, the car has become a means not only to our assorted physical destinations but also to the attainment of our socioeconomic goals, insofar as the automobile has become a symbol of status. In fact, in my observation many, if not most, working professionals willingly undermine their financial security for the sake of being seen driving this year's new SUV or luxury sedan. In short, we've become slaves to the automobile.
精髓：diminish our independence in a number of more significant respects
留意not only…but also的用法
沒有甚麽驚寰宇泣鬼神的事例，但卻能用平凡生存中的點滴起到說理的感化，此法值得鑒戒。
Consider next the overall impact of the automobile on our strength as individuals, by which I mean strength of character, or mettle. I would be hard-pressed to list one way in which the automobile enhances one‘s strength of character. Driving a powerful SUV might afford a person a feeling and appearance of strength, or machismo(漢子氣勢). But this feeling has nothing to do with a person's true character. In contrast, there is a certain strength of character that comes with eschewing modern conveniences such as cars, and with the knowledge that one is contributing to a cleaner and quieter environment, a safer neighborhood, and arguably a more genteel society. Also, alternative modes of transportation such as bicycling and walking are forms of exercise which require and promote the virtue of self-discipline. Finally, in my observation people who have forsaken the automobile spend more time at home,swheresthey are more inclined to prepare and even grow their own food, and to spend more time with their families. The former enhances one's independence; the latter enhances the integrity of one's values and the strength of one's family.精髓：contribute to Consider next...Also,...Finally,...in my observation...
Be inclined to do sth. = cling to do sth. = intend to do sth. = be apt to do / aptly do sth.
一種比擬簡略易行的比較/類比：The former…the latter…
To sum up, the automobile helps illustrate that when a luxury becomes a necessity it can sap(留意此位gre常考單詞) our independence and strength as individuals. Perhaps our society is better off, on balance, with such "luxuries" after all, the automobile industry has created countless jobs, raised our standard of living, and made the world more interesting. However, by becoming slaves to the automobile we trade off(= sacrifice) a certain independence and inner strength.
此文章得分應當是5分了。為何?起首，頭尾都不錯;其次，全文無太多的語法毛病，表意清楚，舉例適可而止;再次，剖析手段應用了不完整否認的贊成的爭辯方法，這是最守舊的做法。
以上內容給考生具體先容了gre寫作範文的用法，願望可以給眾人一些寫作思慮，更多gre測驗出色內容盡在留學gre頻道，敬請考生連續存眷。
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